Andrew Braaksma’s purpose in writing “Some Lessons from the Assembly Line” was to give the readers insight into his life. Going to school while maintaining a part-time job in a factory, and how it wares on a persons body. I most definitely agree with Braaksma’s essay I to have a part time job unloading trucks in a warehouse so I can understand the struggle. Having a part-time, I began to understand that I needed to better my own life.
My own revelation is very similar to Andrew Braaksma’s own experience. Since High School ended I’ve bounced around from one dead end job to the next. Seeing people I went to high school with carrying on in college and getting actual degrees made me take a look at my own life and make a decision that I don’t want to be doing this for the next 50 years. I wanted a career I could be proud of. I wanted a life that I could look back on and be proud of the fact that I turned it around by going back to school. Sometimes you have to struggle to find the strength within to make that step and that first step is the hardest. Everyday, though, I am glad I took it.
You did a god job answering the prompt. You gave a great example, but I felt like you were doing more “telling” then “showing”. It was short and vague, I wanted to hear more about your decision making and about your major. You left me wanting to know more about your situation. I can totally relate to your after high school dead end jobs and seeing everyone else go to college when you weren’t; I’ve been there before.
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ReplyDeleteIt sounds like you understood the prompt and what you were responding to. Though you probably could have more descriptive in your own personal story. But great story.
You did an awesome job answering your prompt. I agree with Tiffany. You used a great example but you were telling more than showing. I can relate to your experience because I felt the same way when all my friends were already in college getting on with their lives and I was just at home doing nothing.
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